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    dots Submission Name: Waitingdots
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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.98 - 2126/2084/1587
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    i shouldn't expect it/but on the off chance you might ever read this.


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    dotsWaitingdots
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                                       1.

         maybe it's that i want to visit
         
    yellowstone. the spirit, buoyed. heavy, with
         anticipation.





         2.


         who's to say.

         maybe it's overcast that afternoon, and you can't see the mountains.
         none of the animals are out.
         it's snowing, and i find out i'm really not
         an outdoor person.


         3.










    there's been a pile up. the greyhound's been held up. i'm late making my connection.



    4.
         


         i feel like i'm being judged - for what i have done
         at a bus stop.





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      I just wanted to say how much I liked this. (I really liked this). I may return at a later time to say more, but for now I just wanted to acknowledge that this is excellent.
    | Posted on 2018-01-19 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]


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