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    dots Submission Name: It Used To Be Colddots

    Author: AtrophyEmpathos
    ASL Info:    19 M California
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 45/55/29
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 965
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       written quite a while ago... my lyrics are always short because my songs are mostly instrumental... mainly because I can't sing. lol.

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    dotsIt Used To Be Colddots

    Soft breath in the dead of winter's night
    Steals the atmosphere so we can take flight
    The moment stalls, my heart exalted;
    One thought, one action, one emotion vaulted
    High above all reason.

    Your eyes burn with incandescence;
    A warming touch just from your presence.
    From your lips I steal unearthly bliss:
    This sacred moment, sealed with a kiss.
    For as long as I live and in my dying breath
    I promise you that I will remember this.

    Submitted on 2004-08-07 02:11:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a classic magical moment that just stops ur heart dead in its tracks. U captured the moment well... i felt it, we all have one of those in our lifetime. good work, great imagery and flow.
    | Posted on 2004-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ang | [ Reply to This ]
      awsome, i really liked it the last fore lines did it for me, i bet it males an awsome song, great write dude, in the second stansa u could switch the 3rd and 4th line around, just a thought.
    | Posted on 2004-08-07 00:00:00 | by ALURIO | [ Reply to This ]

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