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    dots Submission Name: Sleep Talkdots

    Author: Queen_of_spades
    ASL Info:    21/F/Nocturne
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 95/166/107
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 354
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I wrote this a few years ago and forgot about it until today. It was dated 2015, so I wrote it while skyping with a wonderful sleeping human that is now my fiance. :]

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    dotsSleep Talkdots

    You've been talking in your sleep
    of secrets you'd rather keep
    you're a one man confessional
    but you're safe with me

    The last time that I'll eat
    is next again we'll meet
    I'm surviving on your kisses
    until you stop giving them

    Impossibly close and so far away
    sifting time through the hour
    familiar itch for the day

    You've got that angelic face
    so hard to misplace
    unfolding all your energy
    tending fires in your sleep

    You've got that sweet talk
    even when you sleep talk
    I'm addicted to your mind
    while falling into deep space

    Submitted on 2018-01-15 15:51:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I truly liked this, It has an airiness about it. That is a really good thing, and one i cant myself capture. I can almost picture your person lying there. The only thing that bugged me and trust me it is hardly worth mentioning is the very last part. its off.. in my opinion. maybe it's the way the other parts rymed and it does not. you used talk twice..which is fine , but when you are reading it , that part disrupted the flow. Anyway again hardly worth the mention considering i enjoyed your work so much.
    | Posted on 2018-01-28 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]

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