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    dots Submission Name: World I No Longer Wantdots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 5/119/134
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWorld I No Longer Wantdots
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    I can still see rainbows.
    Music continues to sound beautiful.
    Food keeps tasting delicious.
    My nose can still depict different scents.
    And my lungs still get air.
    So what's the difference then?

    I don't want to see the rainbows.
    The beauty of music haunts me.
    Food doesn't seem to find my stomach.
    My nose doesn't have me chasing scents.
    And i no longer want air in my lungs.
    I need you to see all of this.

    All of this.
    It isn't because you gave them to me.
    It isn't because i need you for them.
    It isn't because I'm lonely.
    It isn't because you left.
    It's because you wanted to leave.




    Submitted on 2018-01-22 03:37:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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