Where?

Author: ParanoidParadox ASL Info:    22/m/Canada Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89 /92 /41 Words: 90

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Where?

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Every moment blurred Time's arrow spirals forward Feet failing to find footing Hands shaking from the faltered grip Where are we now? Only just begun To comprehend The places we have been These trees bear no fruit These roads end in cliffs This voice can only whisper This wind silences all The past weighs heavy Lessons still unlearned Lessons not understood It's time to let go Where are we now? Time's arrow spirals forward These roads end in cliffs It's time to let go.

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Excellent work. The description of the lost state is given meticulously. Feet failing to find footing Hands shaking from the faltered grip Beautiful lines, explains the oblivious state of mind which is incomprehensible.

| Posted on 2018-02-07 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]

Great work, i liked the repetition, with spiral arrow. How it appears both in the beginning, and end. One does get a feeling of being lost, hence the title, I presume.the only advice i can lend is perhaps in paragraph 2, BEGUN, feels wrong, not sure why , i think i wanted it to be beginning. Anyway excellent job. H.Price

| Posted on 2018-01-28 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]

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