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Brigit


Author: endlessgame23
ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28 /42 /44
Words: 135
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Brigit



Dearest Muse, my Inspiration,
Gone, are you, from my imagination.
Fled my arm's open embrace
spit your venom upon my face
left in a frothy wake
of Fury and Grace

I, the Abandoned
the Assaulted, the crazed
cry out for your return
immediately, undelayed
But your Spirit heeds no warning
ignores my every plea, I live
in the Agony of your Scorning

Can we not reconcile?
Undefined by our differences
(You're ethereal presence,
my mundane existence)
Yet, the same are we in Joy
created by the Pen
the Paper, and the worlds we write in
Alas, I have run out of your Elixir..
Dearest Muse..
Until we meet again,
E.




Submitted on 2018-01-24 13:20:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Beautiful! As we have chatted about before, writing about writer's block sometimes cures writer's block.

This piece seems dark...as if without the inspiration to write could cause the end of worlds. I guess, in a way, not being able to create can end worlds...the worlds that might have been conjured with pen & paper.

I liked the soft rhyming - or what I would call soft rhyming (not every verse). The words chosen are spot on, taking me to a place where written words and imagination can go...

Take a look at my poem "The Muse"...while not similar to your piece, it does talk to writer's block (but in a different way).

Kelly
| Posted on 2018-02-05 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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