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    dots Submission Name: Brigitdots
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    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 28/41/44
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsBrigitdots
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    Dearest Muse, my Inspiration,
    Gone, are you, from my imagination.
    Fled my arm's open embrace
    spit your venom upon my face
    left in a frothy wake
    of Fury and Grace

    I, the Abandoned
    the Assaulted, the crazed
    cry out for your return
    immediately, undelayed
    But your Spirit heeds no warning
    ignores my every plea, I live
    in the Agony of your Scorning

    Can we not reconcile?
    Undefined by our differences
    (You're ethereal presence,
    my mundane existence)
    Yet, the same are we in Joy
    created by the Pen
    the Paper, and the worlds we write in
    Alas, I have run out of your Elixir..
    Dearest Muse..
    Until we meet again,
    E.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Beautiful! As we have chatted about before, writing about writer's block sometimes cures writer's block.

    This piece seems dark...as if without the inspiration to write could cause the end of worlds. I guess, in a way, not being able to create can end worlds...the worlds that might have been conjured with pen & paper.

    I liked the soft rhyming - or what I would call soft rhyming (not every verse). The words chosen are spot on, taking me to a place where written words and imagination can go...

    Take a look at my poem "The Muse"...while not similar to your piece, it does talk to writer's block (but in a different way).

    Kelly
    | Posted on 2018-02-05 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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