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Dashboard Light


Author: layDsayD
ASL Info:    29/f/florida
Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264 /243 /147
Words: 74
Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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ahh the great betrayal..


Dashboard Light




I love you
Last text
It was my I’m sorry
I wasn’t though
Not really
I knew
Of course
I always fucking know
It was muddy
mist like
hazy
But still I knew
I love you
Last text
he was in you
you were in him
that exact second
did you see it
what was that like
not enough to stop you
or him
I fucking loved you





Submitted on 2018-01-28 21:28:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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