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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 647
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 482



    Description:
       ahh the great betrayal..


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    I love you
    Last text
    It was my I’m sorry
    I wasn’t though
    Not really
    I knew
    Of course
    I always fucking know
    It was muddy
    mist like
    hazy
    But still I knew
    I love you
    Last text
    he was in you
    you were in him
    that exact second
    did you see it
    what was that like
    not enough to stop you
    or him
    I fucking loved you





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