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    dots Submission Name: Summerdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 1134
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1164



    Description:
       Summer is from a collection I call Snapshots, It is meant to be the first of four, winter, fall, and spring are the other parts of this story line.


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    dotsSummerdots
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    Flash
    Momentary blindness
    Blink, blink, blink
    Summer is gone
    Confused, I shake my head
    As I would many, many times
    But, this scene can not be shaken
    The sticky June heat is replaced
    comfortable cool breeze moves a golden strand
    the trees are not as green
    their crunchy covering is at my feet
    somewhere wood burns, it is far
    still my nostrils flare
    Have I died?
    Momma, Momma
    Nothing.
    I must be asleep then.
    A deep red heart- shaped leave moves
    Its point trapped under my dirty Maryjane
    Well, what a pretty dream
    A young girls fancy for pretty things is instinct
    My fingers are on their way to my pocket when I see it
    All wide head and flicking tongue
    Like a rusty hook hidden in the leaves
    It is death, even a child knows
    as I will know it every other time we meet
    A scream is planned, but not produced
    Sting, slow burn, feet too heavy to move
    I smell smoke, but taste metal.
    Flash
    Mommas hand is sweaty
    Did you hear anything I just said?




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