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    dots Submission Name: What happensdots
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    Author: Wolfwatching
    ASL Info:    28/Male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    7.81 - 94/130/109
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Sun-roasted out by sea in a carriage
    Green water is spilling over the gardens
    A dream; us sitting across from each other
    Every word we say is soft as wallpaper;
    I remember the smell of wine and bonfire smoke

    As we alight inside the packed station
    It seems like the entrance to a water-park
    Or some sea resort I saw on a brochure
    Im at ease at not knowing where we're going
    I remember the smell of wine and bonfire smoke.

    The long shadows are coming across the grass
    And I could swear you're right here by my side,
    Clouds move slow as we try to keep this shape
    This curious shape from so long ago.
    I remember the smell of wine and bonfire smoke.

    Do you know what shade of the past is in these dreams?
    Far away there's two of us in waking life,
    And if one dreams the absence of the other
    I doubt they wonder what it even means.






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