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    dots Submission Name: Bee Keeperdots
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    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 28/41/44
    Words: 422
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 518
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    Bytes: 2473



    Description:
       Attempt at Pontoum poetry


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    My chair is uncomfortable as I sit across the table
    The prophetess, blind and aged, just stares
    I wish to speak, but am unable
    She barely breathes, she's unaware

    The prophetess, blind and aged, just stares
    offering no fortune, asking no recompense
    She barely breathes, she's unaware
    I am trapped in curious suspense

    Offering no fortune, asking no recompense
    I wish to leave this horrid place
    I am trapped by curious suspense
    staring into Fate's placid face

    I wish to leave this horrid place
    With or without the answers I seek
    staring into Fate's placid face
    I dare think to challenge, my Spirit is weak

    With or without the answers I seek
    I shall finish my Hero's Quest
    I dare think to challenge, my Spirit is weak
    Perhaps, in prayers, I shall find rest

    I shall finish my Hero's Quest
    or wither and die in the attempt
    perhaps, in prayers, I shall find rest
    or the endless echoes of promises unkept

    Wither and die in the attempt
    as I procrastinate and play games
    the endless echoes of promises unkept
    taunt me, haunt me until I am insane

    As I procrastinate and play games
    the world dies in a billion screams
    taunt me, haunt me until I am insane
    never leaving, not even in dreams

    The world dies with a billion screams
    the loudest being the pain of my queen
    never leaving, not even in dreams
    As the War wages in World's between

    The loudest still is the pain of my queen
    her heart, black and molded, beats no more
    As War wages in the World's between
    Chaos, lies in wait beyond the door

    Her heart, black and molded, beats no more
    Her kingdom crumbles to the dirt
    Chaos, lies in wait beyond the door
    poised and ready to strike, to hurt

    Her kingdom crumbles to the dirt
    I see all this happen in blind eyes
    Poised and ready to strike, to hurt
    The Devil's laughter is my demise

    I see all this happen in blind eyes
    I wish to speak and am unable
    The Devil's laughter is my demise
    my chair is uncomfortable as I sit across the table




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