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    dots Submission Name: Devils in the Detailsdots
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    Author: endlessgame23
    ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28/42/44
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1322
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    Description:
       attempt at Ghazal poetry


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    dotsDevils in the Detailsdots
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    In the Lands of Long Ago,
    there was a kingdom no one knows

    She danced in the fields
    of fresh, fallen snow

    He wasted away in the tower
    condemned to Exhile, alone with Shadows

    Devils in the details

    Our hero, defeated, lies broken, bleeding
    His soul destined to Hel's below

    The monsters sleep beneath the tide
    the titans of the war we chose

    Here comes the end of our world
    and the beginning of our woes

    Devils in the details

    In the Lands of Yet to Come
    there's a kingdom where Promise grows

    the fire lights their silhouettes
    together, the brighter They glow

    Wilhelmina, Edith's Daughter, of Gilead
    The Master of the Show

    Devils in the details




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      the pice , offers the timesless stance of a land crused. , and the terrible is a love all that is for gotten. the Devel in the details , every time this stance is mention it is passive and true , a very cool work, The pice remids me of ol fables, where as the fallen are cerabarted and not forgotten. Then the twist the place to go is the dDelvel in the details .,like narnia? it reads like a mid-evil fight.
    | Posted on 2019-02-28 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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