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Devils in the Details


Author: endlessgame23
ASL Info:    25/f/The Endless Table
Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 28 /42 /44
Words: 154
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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attempt at Ghazal poetry


Devils in the Details



In the Lands of Long Ago,
there was a kingdom no one knows

She danced in the fields
of fresh, fallen snow

He wasted away in the tower
condemned to Exhile, alone with Shadows

Devils in the details

Our hero, defeated, lies broken, bleeding
His soul destined to Hel's below

The monsters sleep beneath the tide
the titans of the war we chose

Here comes the end of our world
and the beginning of our woes

Devils in the details

In the Lands of Yet to Come
there's a kingdom where Promise grows

the fire lights their silhouettes
together, the brighter They glow

Wilhelmina, Edith's Daughter, of Gilead
The Master of the Show

Devils in the details




Submitted on 2018-02-07 23:19:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  the pice , offers the timesless stance of a land crused. , and the terrible is a love all that is for gotten. the Devel in the details , every time this stance is mention it is passive and true , a very cool work, The pice remids me of ol fables, where as the fallen are cerabarted and not forgotten. Then the twist the place to go is the dDelvel in the details .,like narnia? it reads like a mid-evil fight.
| Posted on 2019-02-28 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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