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wrote after seeing the most beautiful pink and purple sunset...it reminded me f her wth her purple hair and pink lips...
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The plum sky plumed like a peacock
In gold and pink
Which smeared into the blue until it set purple
Over the beige remnants of summer
Speckled over the hazel fields
Are shards of Spring
A pinch of green, a pirouette of yellow, a hint of red
Fragments in blackberry winter
Beckoning the blossoms to burst from the buds
Here lies my heart
A lone blackberry gilded by the sun
I offered it to you-
I placed it between your teeth
I marveled as it twizzled on your tongue
Your mouth now stained
Your hibiscus lips now swaddled in purple
I cradled them with mine own
I picked the black vestiges from your teeth
I tried to stitch them together
To find a semblance of that blackberry
The mélange of purple and periwinkle
Reminded me of that sunset
Which plumed like a peacock
In gold and pink until it set purple in the horizon
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Submitted on 2018-02-10 12:17:44
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I like how descriptive you are with colors. Very beautiful imagery, well done.
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