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    dots Submission Name: Achedots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.08 - 366/364/154
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAchedots
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    Tonight I found a one-winged bird--
    A broken-bell
    With the ache of moon in her eyes

    I peeled her from the wet black night
    And pressed her to my chin
    I held her as a cluster of fruit

    (As softly as the orange I placed in my father’s hand)---

    Her scent
    Circled my dreaming head
    Like the indigo night circles fireflies

    -I know its love that took her wing-

    The light of new wounds lighting
    A thousand nights of travel

    I‘ve seen dawn’s first light thrash red across that wing

    Which wearing sorrow as water
    Returns to the earth from which it sprang

    And perhaps this is why love takes a wing
    Only to return it in oneness with another

    I, too, shall return, my purple gorrión - to
    Your lips
    Your knees
    Your side
    Wing mounted and
    Bearing dreams for the lolling world

    dicicco cosentino©




    Submitted on 2018-02-12 12:52:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The night a wound beheld a wound
    and did its best to soothe the ache
    it seemed as permanent as hope
    and then left sorrows in its wake...

    Just thought on the thoughts that led to yours.
    | Posted on 2018-03-02 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I‘ve seen dawn’s first light thrash red across that wing
    Which wearing sorrow as water
    Returns to the earth from which it sprang

    This. This is true poetry.

    Lovely. Gut-wrenching. Poetry.


    Jane
    | Posted on 2018-02-15 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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