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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 419/435/131
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I’m dying,
    she said

    In a soft voice that no one heard

    But the murmur in her heart repeated it

    I’m dying

    Falling off a cliff
    Arms across the chest
    numb

    Do her bones ache
    or cut like knives as they burst from the skin?
    Do they smash and splinter
    into a million tiny pieces?

    Her eyes focus on

    This

    Bright pink bitterroot hanging, clinging,
    pushing up through
    the cracks and crevices of jagged stone
    to thrive in rock and dust

    catching the rays of sun from the sky










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      Kinda dark start. It seems our person is seeing the beauty in the struggle only as she has given up and plunges. Makes me think it isn't a good idea to take the plunge, so, in that, it is life affirming.
    | Posted on 2018-07-25 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Days are hard. We all need a pink root to show us the way through the packed dirt and stones, even if it's just for some internal hope and not enough to grasp physically. Love your writing. Hope you're doing well.
    | Posted on 2018-04-01 00:00:00 | by WriteSomething | [ Reply to This ]


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