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    dots Submission Name: Still Fighting See?dots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.47 - 5/117/132
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStill Fighting See?dots
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    I want to stop pretending
    But I'm stuck here just defending

    This pain seems to have no ending
    So my love for life is pending

    I think its easy to see
    That I'm not who I want to be

    So please lets just agree
    Before things get to ugly

    I just want a home please
    One where my heart won't freeze

    But I wanna keep that nice breeze
    So I feel safe to pray on my knees

    I know I'm not okay
    But I fight through this all day

    Now I've run out of words to say
    So I beg you please don't go away





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    ||| Comments |||
      The poem is written in a rhythm. Sweet and human feelings are being reflected in the poem. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2018-06-28 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good, deep thoughts, well put togetrher.
    | Posted on 2018-02-20 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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