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    dots Submission Name: Estranged / Shocksdots

    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsEstranged / Shocksdots

    i knew a hurt. much of the same.
    a hymn. a pain. a per-
    son. much like the individual unused to swimming around ice-holes.
    i knew a pain. that pulsed, and pushed,
         and came up gasping for breath.


    and i asked myself whose                                             
    heart that was                                             

                                            Love is something that jolts you each
                                                 whether it visits
    or no.

         i know this because the wires are

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      Feels like I’ve forgotten how to talk about poetry. It’s odd the way languages change. Like there are roads that lead out but there’s no telling which will be accessible when it’s time to speak. Perhaps we are also like that with poetry. Moving in and out toward different voices.

    This is another poem of yours lately that I like very much. Not sure I have the words to say why. I just like the way it articulates itself, it feels natural.
    | Posted on 2018-03-15 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]

    | Posted on 2018-03-02 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

         it's like, whenever i act to show you i care,

         you have to immediately go out and fuck me over for it.

    | Posted on 2018-03-02 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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