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    dots Submission Name: Purposedots
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    Author: SincerWritinAsh
    Elite Ratio:    6.25 - 299/262/146
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 334
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    Description:
       I don't even know if people frequent this site any more and I am so frickin old and haven't been around. I had a really great day today and felt like writing. In a positive way. It needs to be tamed and reformatted. I actually think I have forgotten how to do that. I would love some help working out the organization of it. I wonder if any one is out there?


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    Stolen moments of why…
    The why, the reasoning, the purpose –
    Of my living.

    Waking up, smiling at my daughter,
    Her toothless grin returning
    As we lacquer her nails a happy pink
    And curl the ends of her long hair,
    All to frame the smile in a school picture.
    Rushing about the morning clean up,
    Cursing under my breath,
    Hearing the toddler’s echoing.
    I quickly reprimand, apologize,
    And hide my laughing.
    I hug and kiss away the memory,
    Hoping to disguise my earlier complaining.
    The baby, small and quick, climbing…
    Climbing on chairs and toys,
    Fussing from her nap being late.
    Gathering her in my arms, snuggling.
    Sing off key and rocking, she is softly snoring.
    Making none of this seem like chores.
    Once lunchtime comes and goes,
    I catch a rare moment with him, enjoying
    Left over wine and microwave pizzas,
    Chilling and dreaming, flirting, and planning.
    Quick under covers and even quicker showers.
    I thank whatever higher powers,
    For the spark of original feeling,
    Helping to carry us through the daily,
    Keeping us straight and unfazed
    As we keep up our world.
    Our world which can easily become
    Mundane, insane, and plain frustrating.
    Easing away, letting go of each other’s fingers,
    Eyes meeting to linger, not needing words murmured,
    Just knowing is enough.

    Stolen moments of why…
    The why, the reasoning, the purpose –
    Of my living.









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      Maybe it’s because I’m a father, and it just caught me at a moment, thinking of my sleeping, silly, wonderful children. Maybe it’s because I know how hard marriage can be, and I harvest those little moments of sunshine to later wield in the dark times. Maybe it’s just well written. Most likely all three. It hit me, in the best ways. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2018-03-13 00:00:00 | by RisingSon | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't feel this needs a whole lot of editing. It seems pretty clear to me, an apt description of a day in your life. Engaging and edifying I can imagine your feelings well as your day unfolds. The things that make it worthwhile and satisfying. All in all a lovely write. It's been a while since I've seen you on here writing. Good to see.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2018-03-10 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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