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    dots Submission Name: Givingdots
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    Author: jjd
    ASL Info:    20/male/Griffin, Ga.
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 20/83/37
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 606
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 615



    Description:
       I had friends, but I see that they are just using me. here and there, and everywhere.


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    dotsGivingdots
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    It seems the more I give the more you take.
    I try and try but it seems I'm left to dry.
    you take advantage of my kindness,
    and don't replace what you take.
    I care and care and try and try, but i'm left to dry.

    I break down, and cry, and try to explain, but there's nothing to say.
    this world is has turned good guys into bad.
    I see and witness and want to break.
    I see myself hitting your face.
    leaving you left in a bloody place.

    I give and give, and try and try. but theres nothing more to replace.




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