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    dots Submission Name: Treasure Chestdots
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    Author: PieceOfCake
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsTreasure Chestdots
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    You are saying something
    Yet I can’t be distracted by your windy words
    There are little dark hairs
    Wild arching beasts

    Leaping over your collar
    Copious visible stampedes
    In barbaric droves
    Emerging from the sternum

    Clawing to be let out
    From the red cotton you call armor
    And my fingers plot of digging into the blend
    Making five keyholes




    Submitted on 2018-03-27 06:31:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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