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    dots Submission Name: Songdots
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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.95 - 2137/2098/1688
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSongdots
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         this one's been playing at work -
         a situation that's not altogether fair.
         the mind, occupied, the body, operating under duress,
         and yet. the words, steadily, stealthily, achieving a pitch
         my spirit grows up to meet.











         the chest plate removed - so that you can see

         

         these walls won't hold up [themselves].







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