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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.96 - 2132/2095/1635
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                                       Sometimes I wonder
                                       what's the use of heart. and worth?






         If I might only achieve a similar result
         filling up










         how many jars

         

         with how much
         sand





    Submitted on 2018-04-06 00:31:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoy this type of writing, very polished, with the metaphor well-thought out and yet not forced. My only other comment would maybe to revise the opening line? In comparison to the rest, it seems very mundane and over-used.
    | Posted on 2018-05-25 00:00:00 | by expiring_touch | [ Reply to This ]


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