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Submission Name: Break Up dots

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Author:	WriteSomething
Elite Ratio:	3.4 - 24/22/9
Words:	44

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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Break Up dots

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You will be the No One Special,
rarely mentioned in my story,
details dulled to "don't remember",
brushed off with a shrug of shoulder.
History will write us Strangers
"Us" divided, "Ours" destroyed
leaving "Me" the single factor
because the "You" is void.

Submitted on 2018-04-13 07:07:25 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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The poem depicts very well the pathetic situation. I really liked the usage of words like "Us" divided, "Ours" destroyed. The words portray the anguish and the anger.
| Posted on 2018-07-18 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
Wow. I can really relate to this one. I love your concise word choices and the brevity of the piece. Very nicely done. Just somebody that you used to know. . .

| Posted on 2018-07-14 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]

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