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    dots Submission Name: Break Updots
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    Author: WriteSomething
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 24/22/9
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBreak Updots
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    You will be the No One Special,
    rarely mentioned in my story,
    details dulled to "don't remember",
    brushed off with a shrug of shoulder.
    History will write us Strangers
    "Us" divided, "Ours" destroyed
    leaving "Me" the single factor
    because the "You" is void.




    Submitted on 2018-04-13 07:07:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The poem depicts very well the pathetic situation. I really liked the usage of words like "Us" divided, "Ours" destroyed. The words portray the anguish and the anger.
    | Posted on 2018-07-18 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I can really relate to this one. I love your concise word choices and the brevity of the piece. Very nicely done. Just somebody that you used to know. . .
    | Posted on 2018-07-14 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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