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    dots Submission Name: Pressuredots
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    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 185/164/70
    Words: 447
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 933
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    I work all day, I work all night, just barely scraping by
    The more you say, the more we fight, the more you seem to cry
    Like a sick, sad carousel that keeps on spinning ‘round
    On auto-pilot; I don’t have time to stop and break down
    You say to me, you can relate, to carrying this on your back
    How can that be, when this bed you made, is made up of what you lack
    You want to play the victim when you give this half of what you can
    Then you have the nerve to say to me that you understand

    I can feel the pressure as it’s digging in
    I’m suffocated by these four walls closing in
    Barely breathing, barely scraping by
    When all I want to do is just live my life
    Without having to ask why

    Why I’ve got to work myself to death
    Why I’ve got to be the one to stress
    Why I’m the one carrying the weight
    Why I can’t get any time to breathe
    2X

    I barely sleep, but when I do, thoughts of when I’m awake
    Consuming me, these thoughts of you, and the toll that this takes
    You keep asking me the same questions that I’ve already answered
    Like every argument and everything I said never even mattered
    Bills pile up, the pressure swells, even though I work all day and night
    You’ve given up, on yourself, I am forced into this never-ending fight
    My bones will break under the weight of this burden you’ve escaped
    The one that consumes my everything; It’s more than I can take

    I can feel the pressure as it’s digging in
    I’m suffocated by these four walls closing in
    Barely breathing, barely scraping by
    When all I want to do is just live my life
    Without having to ask why

    Why I’ve got to work myself to death
    Why I’ve got to be the one to stress
    Why I’m the one carrying the weight
    Why I can’t get any time to breathe
    2X

    On one hand I want to give in; I want some kind of release
    I want to escape the pressure that’s building up in me
    On the other, I know that I have no choice anymore
    If I don’t fight this will take everything I’ve ever worked for
    Why does it have to be this way, why can’t I be free?
    Please, just tell me why…

    Why I’ve got to work myself to death
    Why I’ve got to be the one to stress
    Why I’m the one carrying the weight
    Why I can’t get any time to breathe
    2X




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