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    dots Submission Name: Hollow Pointsdots

    Author: RequiemOfDreams
    ASL Info:    20/M/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 97/140/38
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
    Total Views: 261
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1580

       Wrote this about 6~ months ago, first posted elsewhere around December 20, 2017

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    dotsHollow Pointsdots

    In many chambers countless hollow points rest
    Targeting them afar from the sniper's nest
    Execution of maneuvers trained to an instinct
    Never relax until the enemy is extinct
    Ideas fuel the finger and compose the round
    Below is an enemy shouting until we're drowned

    A clown dances upon the stage and boasts
    Rapid fire shots, hurting all coast to coast
    Spreading dishonesty to all the folks
    Who won't see it for what it is, a hoax
    A bullet won't cure, it will not reveal
    The poison of the mind, that we must heal

    Why are the old gods stealing the spotlight
    Treading over us in a lasting fight
    Near immortal ideas which are prone to latching
    That harm better ideas from completely hatching
    They have already been replaced many years ago
    Old gods risen from the ashes of another foe
    The empty gods supported by mere blind hate and rage
    We can't ignore them, absolutely must engage
    We must take a new tactic to resolve
    To take true victory we must evolve
    Curing the poisoned mind must consider
    What exposure will cause it to wither

    Millions have sacrificed much to alter the story
    At best we have only had temporary glory
    If war could have ended points of pain and division
    We would have long since acquired a final decision
    All the sacrifices made were at best a prequel
    We must accept that war, war will never change people

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