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Author: monad
ASL Info:    64/M/California
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Words: 200
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Succubus incubus incongruous incredulous.


Puissant piquant and predatory
And observant from afar
He looks down on your slumber
Like a door that's left ajar

Plying with his manly vice
A reckless male visage
A rogue of masculine device
Seeks entrance to your mind

He saunters with a swagger
A macho savvy moxie
To personify virility's incarnate
His dream zone's metier

He sifts your sexual entourage
In search of sprawls recumbence
To tantalize climactic fervor
With lambent photic scenes

Grasping at your revelries
He spies the wanton lust
With swanky strut appealing
Your primal urge to sate

He leaves undone resistance
With innate resilience seized
The lavish wayward implications
Of unrequited livid deeds

Like passion's lurid lecheries
An insatiable torrid sooth
You wrestle with his adamance
Your carnal ecstasies revealed

You pounce on his exsertion
You splay your agile form
wriggling like a supple nymph
You accept his blatant storm

You writhe in your abandon
In a euphoric supplication
His machismo thrust enveloping
Your wildest latent needs

With no regrets or reticence
you awaken from this dream
To find yourself alone again
Like it had never been

Submitted on 2018-05-21 10:40:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I'm sure Freud and Jung are having some fun bantering this one about while admiring your picture with that glorious shirt, brilliant necklace and wall rug in the background. Structurally this one is a tease with a bit of rhyme starting off, changing, hiding and peeking out again perhaps like your opening lines and from the previous comment from Jezi's crack in the closet door.

Lot's of news (fake or not?) on the predatory male aspect of our being so was this a wisp of premonition that worked its way out via keyboard? Both Incubus and Succubus are demonic forms but if either option is open to a given demon what a boon to the "dark side" as often held in repression or hidden deep within one's shadow that could be! (Adjusts dirty old man hat.)

From a critical aspect (this site says to) if looking at something like this that I was writing, I'd suggest there's currently too many uses of "he", "you" and "your" unless that is a working element you intend for effect. This particularly from someone bearing such a vast array of available vocabulary as yourself.

At the closing i wonder if some interjection of evidence for one's having had a "wet dream" might not be welcome, assuming one is not worried about incurring an "R" rating for doing so? "With no regrets or reticence" implies ultimate consent as any jury of peers should find, hence, "there's nothing dirty going on" as Dolly sings in my favorite musical.

How about a story about an Incubus meeting up with a Succubus? Hmmm...
| Posted on 2018-10-06 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  The imagery and content here is strong! Reminds me of a time recently when I had a sleep paralysis attack and saw my closet door open a crack and when I knew that it had been shut tight. I couldn't do anything but watch as it open just a crack and something was watching me until I panicked and shook myself out of the paralysis. Creepy yet fascinating. This is some deep stuff that you've wrote here. I haven't read you in awhile. Nice to read you again Bruce. Hope all is well you :)

| Posted on 2018-06-01 00:00:00 | by ShadowParadox | [ Reply to This ]

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