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    dots Submission Name: Incubusdots
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    Author: monad
    ASL Info:    64/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1092/410/117
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Succubus incubus incongruous incredulous.


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    Puissant piquant and predatory
    And observant from afar
    He looks down on your slumber
    Like a door that's left ajar

    Plying with his manly vice
    A reckless male visage
    A rogue of masculine device
    Seeks entrance to your mind

    He saunters with a swagger
    A macho savvy moxie
    To personify virility's incarnate
    His dream zone's metier

    He sifts your sexual entourage
    In search of sprawls recumbence
    To tantalize climactic fervor
    With lambent photic scenes

    Grasping at your revelries
    He spies the wanton lust
    With swanky strut appealing
    Your primal urge to sate

    He leaves undone resistance
    With innate resilience seized
    The lavish wayward implications
    Of unrequited livid deeds

    Like passion's lurid lecheries
    An insatiable torrid sooth
    You wrestle with his adamance
    Your carnal ecstasies revealed

    You pounce on his exsertion
    You splay your agile form
    wriggling like a supple nymph
    You accept his blatant storm

    You writhe in your abandon
    In a euphoric supplication
    His machismo thrust enveloping
    Your wildest latent needs

    With no regrets or reticence
    you awaken from this dream
    To find yourself alone again
    Like it had never been




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      I'm sure Freud and Jung are having some fun bantering this one about while admiring your picture with that glorious shirt, brilliant necklace and wall rug in the background. Structurally this one is a tease with a bit of rhyme starting off, changing, hiding and peeking out again perhaps like your opening lines and from the previous comment from Jezi's crack in the closet door.

    Lot's of news (fake or not?) on the predatory male aspect of our being so was this a wisp of premonition that worked its way out via keyboard? Both Incubus and Succubus are demonic forms but if either option is open to a given demon what a boon to the "dark side" as often held in repression or hidden deep within one's shadow that could be! (Adjusts dirty old man hat.)

    From a critical aspect (this site says to) if looking at something like this that I was writing, I'd suggest there's currently too many uses of "he", "you" and "your" unless that is a working element you intend for effect. This particularly from someone bearing such a vast array of available vocabulary as yourself.

    At the closing i wonder if some interjection of evidence for one's having had a "wet dream" might not be welcome, assuming one is not worried about incurring an "R" rating for doing so? "With no regrets or reticence" implies ultimate consent as any jury of peers should find, hence, "there's nothing dirty going on" as Dolly sings in my favorite musical.

    How about a story about an Incubus meeting up with a Succubus? Hmmm...
    | Posted on 2018-10-06 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      The imagery and content here is strong! Reminds me of a time recently when I had a sleep paralysis attack and saw my closet door open a crack and when I knew that it had been shut tight. I couldn't do anything but watch as it open just a crack and something was watching me until I panicked and shook myself out of the paralysis. Creepy yet fascinating. This is some deep stuff that you've wrote here. I haven't read you in awhile. Nice to read you again Bruce. Hope all is well you :)


    Jezi~
    | Posted on 2018-06-01 00:00:00 | by ShadowParadox | [ Reply to This ]


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