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    dots Submission Name: Munyonyodots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 137/245/159
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMunyonyodots
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    the palm tree cuts the moon in half,
    it bleeds its stenciled leaves into the room and shivers

    your eyelash bounces back the shaft
    through burlap curtains, nets, I strain
    to hear where it rejoins the sky,
    the space between cicada timbals --- even
    our own expanding pleura --

    before you shift, before the guard
    slams metal shut and shuffles
    away, across the sweating tiles




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