Love Can Be...

Author: HAVENSMITH92 Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0 /1 /1 Words: 120

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Love Can Be...

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Love means everything It comes from the heart Turns the world to blooms And flushes out the dark. I found your eyes within turmoil You filled the holes in my soul Your touch stitching, icing what I feel I cant explain how my world just lit up As you found your way to me You reached out your hand And all resistance washed away Surrounded by your melody Im so eager to believe Falling, slipping away into a bliss So new to me I can only ask you to hold on My heart searching yours Letting all my inhibitions go As you're falling into my arms.

Submitted on 2018-05-30 01:06:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Isn't love a wonderful feeling? It manages to work it's way into even the coldest of hearts. And in this day and age, amidst all of the turmoil and strife, it still blossoms and changes people. A beautiful thing, isn't it? I enjoyed reading "Love can be...". It spoke to some of the things that love can do. The rhyme was soft, but did just enough to move the verses from start to finish. I did want to ask: why did the second stanza have only three lines? Nice work for your first entry...and welcome to Eliteskills! Kelly

| Posted on 2018-05-30 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]

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