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Author:	HAVENSMITH92
Elite Ratio:	0.52 - 0/1/1
Words:	120

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
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Love means everything
It comes from the heart
Turns the world to blooms
And flushes out the dark.

I found your eyes within turmoil
You filled the holes in my soul
Your touch stitching, icing what I feel

I cant explain how my world just lit up
As you found your way to me
You reached out your hand
And all resistance washed away

Surrounded by your melody
Im so eager to believe
Falling, slipping away into a bliss
So new to me

I can only ask you to hold on
My heart searching yours
Letting all my inhibitions go
As you're falling into my arms.

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Isn't love a wonderful feeling? It manages to work it's way into even the coldest of hearts. And in this day and age, amidst all of the turmoil and strife, it still blossoms and changes people. A beautiful thing, isn't it?

I enjoyed reading "Love can be...". It spoke to some of the things that love can do. The rhyme was soft, but did just enough to move the verses from start to finish.

I did want to ask: why did the second stanza have only three lines?

Nice work for your first entry...and welcome to Eliteskills!

Kelly
| Posted on 2018-05-30 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]

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