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    dots Submission Name: Love Can Be...dots
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    Author: HAVENSMITH92
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove Can Be...dots
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    Love means everything
    It comes from the heart
    Turns the world to blooms
    And flushes out the dark.

    I found your eyes within turmoil
    You filled the holes in my soul
    Your touch stitching, icing what I feel

    I cant explain how my world just lit up
    As you found your way to me
    You reached out your hand
    And all resistance washed away

    Surrounded by your melody
    Im so eager to believe
    Falling, slipping away into a bliss
    So new to me

    I can only ask you to hold on
    My heart searching yours
    Letting all my inhibitions go
    As you're falling into my arms.










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      Isn't love a wonderful feeling? It manages to work it's way into even the coldest of hearts. And in this day and age, amidst all of the turmoil and strife, it still blossoms and changes people. A beautiful thing, isn't it?

    I enjoyed reading "Love can be...". It spoke to some of the things that love can do. The rhyme was soft, but did just enough to move the verses from start to finish.

    I did want to ask: why did the second stanza have only three lines?

    Nice work for your first entry...and welcome to Eliteskills!

    Kelly
    | Posted on 2018-05-30 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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