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    dots Submission Name: Skin of Fablesdots
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    Author: ShadowParadox
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 25/68/35
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSkin of Fablesdots
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    Bent in ivory crème
    My skin is filled with whispers
    Stories bleed thru my pores like honey
    Bones thick with myths
    My ember heart reflects the sunshine
    Like a mirror drowning in liquid glass

    I am an odd little doll
    Baptizing myself in golden mud
    Filling my wounded mouth with the night
    I bend myself inside a primal world
    It is the new earth
    Built out of glass

    When words are spoken
    The voices make shapes in the air
    I swallow my course in delicate gulps
    My veins swollen with diamonds
    My innards pulsing with inspiration
    I bury my head inside poetry’s depth
    My skin exposed to unlimited tales
    They wrap me tight in lavender silk
    My body now papery and fragile

    Before my mouth closes forever against the silk

    I scream to the sun
    “Open me like a lotus
    Quilted in a paradox seed
    Please open me"
    But Sun only hid in her shell
    It was the ink rain with its liquid loom
    Who opened me
    Full of blooms
    Inside a fantasy novel

    Now here I stand
    Fresh from my dark cocoon
    Wings decorated with pens
    My being is a beautiful nightmarish memory
    Built out of insomniac dreams




    Submitted on 2018-06-01 01:34:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    You've got some serious original imagery. Pleasure to read just for that. I get that you are being wrapped in silk and you scream before the silk closes your mouth. I wouldn't change that.
    | Posted on 2018-07-25 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Tattoo artists live for such inspirations. Some seriously dark images here almost too deep to fathom. Some most enjoyably ornate stuff. Good to read you again.

    PS: It should read "Before my mouth closes forever"
    | Posted on 2018-06-01 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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