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    dots Submission Name: Summer Nightsdots
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    Author: ollie_wicked
    ASL Info:    27?FEarth
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 320/200/90
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSummer Nightsdots
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    Nothing quite reminds you that you’re alone like 2am.
    A summer storm to drip drops on your head reminding you that no one is coming.
    You swing on your porch alone.
    No one to illuminate your night but the fireflies.
    You’ll desperately wish that someone , anyone could feel your desolation.
    And come to seek you out.
    But no one does.
    Just drip drop.
    Drip drop.
    Summer sings her song of comforting isolation.
    Just drip drop.
    Sing her song.
    So loud.
    Nothing did feel such like a warm wet night knowing that no one is coming.
    Just you and the
    Drip
    Drop.




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      I like a raining night, but sometimes the rain seems more personal when someone is alone. I do like the line "no one to illuminate your night but the fire flies," it brings to mind that the most wonderful things are only really viewed by you but also when no one else is around to also see it. A deffenit reminder that nights like that like you wrote "no one coming, no one coming to seek you out." This does start to hit home when you mention that summer begins to sang her a song. As I mentioned I like a raining night and one reason it sounds and feel like a soft but personal song almost as if it was meant for me. I injoyed this and appreciate you sharing


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