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    dots Submission Name: Hopelessly Blinddots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.49 - 5/120/134
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHopelessly Blinddots
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    I can’t kill them
    Years and years of trying
    Of failing
    Still here they are
    The demons inside my head

    I hoped they’d leave eventually
    One day they’d just be gone
    Idiotic perhaps
    After all I gave them everything
    Why would they leave that?

    Maybe that’s why they’ll leave
    I give my all and they get bored
    Happened before
    Even that scares me though
    If they leave then who won’t?

    I can’t let them go now
    Not while we’re like this
    Right
    You want me to drown them
    So that I can be happy again

    Sorry to disappoint you
    But I can’t drown them
    Look
    They all look just like you
    And I could never kill something so perfect




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