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    dots Submission Name: Our Cinder Crisisdots
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    Author: SavedDragon
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    Words: 194
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    dotsOur Cinder Crisisdots
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    The ashes raged wildly into thick smoke
    The dark clouds caught memories of times passed
    They were skeptics of their own hands at work
    This was their tragedy, their burning home
    When the pale of water fell into the wishing well
    This was THEIR cinder crisis

    As families grieved at their losses
    When the delay of reflexes succumbed to guilt
    It was the regrettable target of their act
    When fatal outcomes became common causes
    That which made the turn of time unforgettable
    That was A cinder crisis

    It took time and patience to peak into its depths
    Of the vast nature of seas
    The diverse worlds of the forests
    And lended a new sense of mystery
    To the insignificance of humankind
    That was ITS cinder crisis

    The destruction we had created
    Was burned like coal
    When the remains were nothing more but sand
    The decimated volcanic rock left
    To pollute the airs subtle clarity
    That was OUR cinder crisis




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