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    dots Submission Name: Unfortunate Realitydots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.79 - 19/67/85
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsUnfortunate Realitydots
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    Freedom is blood stained
    At the mercy of others
    They all lie and deceive
    While they work undercover
    And babies are born dead
    At the will of their mothers
    In the filthy abandoned homes
    Left for druggies to govern
    There's no life in these places
    No good deeds to take over
    So for now they walk lifeless
    And await to be smothered
    By the ways they have chosen
    In this world full of colors
    But they'll never see them
    With no chance to discover




    Submitted on 2018-06-14 01:24:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good write. A good description of atrocious and poignant world which is unlike the world of colors which will remain undiscovered to this life less world.
    | Posted on 2018-09-03 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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