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    dots Submission Name: Waspsdots
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    Author: Wolfwatching
    ASL Info:    28/Male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    7.68 - 96/136/117
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 559
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I would like space at the start of that last line, the sting. Not sure how though so I've had to put those hyphens in.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWaspsdots
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    They're glistening wings in candy floss machines
    Tackling glue feasts; drink pink sweet spilt cidona
    Getting frazzled in the gutters of old side-streets
    These terrorists of Bus Eireann, our elders told us

    "Don't go near to them and they won't near you".
    I trod on one and his tribe redoubled harm
    Those yellow and black eyes projected the hue
    Of phycopaths trapped in marmalade jars

    Trapped inside of giddy race wars with the bees
    Suffocating alone under scalt glass
    I had little doubt they wanted to remain;
    I knew their confused drone
    ----------That could bring a flower to nothing.




    Submitted on 2018-06-14 07:18:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece might not have any comments - beside my own - because it is truly one to fathom. Thank you for sharing. As a reader, I have been provoked.
    | Posted on 2018-08-19 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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