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    dots Submission Name: May 31 2018dots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 53/169/178
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    dotsMay 31 2018dots
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    While looking out into the night
    I realize the vibes and rise
    to the occasion to sit and watch




    As the ocean moves and floods
    Fills the salty nightly air it becomes
    Another emotional moon
    as she glares
    upon the land
    and shares
    such beauty
    and a voice




    Sings a song with such a grace
    That light it shines and fills the space
    The space of time and distance torn
    Between the land and beyond the shores
    this light its shine sure fills the space







    Although we may never find
    The conclusions of which reside
    inside the stars that emerged
    and birthed a love into the earth.
    Her breath exhaled
    With force and strength
    blew the dust right off this place
    A breath of Life some would say




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