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    dots Submission Name: I'm heredots
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    Author: BloodtornAngel
    ASL Info:    21/F/inyour wildest dream
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 21/28/43
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Romance
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    dotsI'm heredots
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    Dont worry
    I'm here
    I know I've been gone a long time
    I know things have been bad
    But I'm here
    Dont worry
    Take my hand once again
    I'll lead you away from this
    Dont worry
    I'm here
    Kiss me as the rain patters on
    Hold me as the lightening strikes the night
    I'm here
    Dont worry
    When the sun burns out
    And the moon crumbles
    Dont worry
    I'll be right here




    Submitted on 2018-08-06 22:17:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's always nice to have some reassurance from time to time, even better if everlasting.

    I like that you've left the "who" up to the reader so each can personalize those words into hearing it from the one they want to hear it from.

    This does invoke emotion, particularly if the "who" has been missed for some time.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2018-11-03 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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