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    dots Submission Name: Watch them Diedots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 75/191/246
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsWatch them Diedots
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    We're all canonical -
    accidental possibilities set to a theme;
    a story we write to our dreams.
    Center of the universe,
    a star on a screen;
    a star our ancestors believed
    brought more than the finite
    end, where we will all meet.

    We watch them die,
    every day without fail.
    A thread unraveled -
    a fish in the pail -
    someone who never had the chance
    to say goodbye.

    Some will wail in sorrow,
    this truth escapes
    those forgotten,
    or unnamed
    or those decried.

    We're all expendable -
    ivory or ebony, a pawn is a pawn.
    Mere lines in a design
    wrote by machinations far beyond
    the myths and gods
    conspiracy and crime.
    Their hands are real,
    their ink holds well, well within
    the deepest well.

    Time has arrived
    for those beloved and those denied
    which suffered indignation,
    molestation
    of body and mind

    They await a new day,
    just to have hope arrive
    and watch them die.




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      Beautiful.. I'll come back to digest and write more later.
    | Posted on 2019-04-28 00:00:00 | by rememberplaydoh | [ Reply to This ]


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