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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 53/169/178
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Just when the wind decides
    To blow away all which resides
    The moon emerges with such a force
    The tides they pull and push their course.



    Across the sky a star
    Streaks by.
    Grabs ahold
    Of all who see
    And captures a wish
    Or maybe three.


    Do you think that star
    Agrees ?
    That you are you and
    I am me? Do you think it really
    knows how captivated we are
    As it glows? Our hearts make wishes
    Upon the arrival and look for reasons
    to set our minds upon it.








    A star it fell into the earth
    It left a crater with its girth
    Fell right through my heart
    And left a hole inside let’s start
    With a thought a glimpse of fate
    The dreams
    the talks
    the moments
    Of change.


    Just As if










    it was oblivious of gravity.







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      i really like this. do the things we place value on even recognize the value we place on them. do they value or even recognize us. I guess i fall for that stuff sometimes and it careens towards me. not as much as before. i tend to put my heart out for the literal these days. the figurative has too many possibilities and i found my interpretations were too often just what i wanted to see. and the whole not knowing when things aren't concrete can be confusing. oh well. this just got me thinking a little so i figured i'd share. sorry if i'm all over the place.
    | Posted on 2019-04-18 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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