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    dots Submission Name: Strettodots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 230/389/136
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStrettodots
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    If I'm going to feel like this
    I'll do it right,
    god dammit

    so I listen to sad men
    singing sad songs,

    and wander
    picturesque
    out into the night

    heart-heavy
    for no reason at all

    the sky is low and the air
    is thinking about autumn

    and even above headphones
    the crickets
    resound

    oh, you know
    the world is big and the universe
    unfathomable

    and so much of it
    I don't care for at all

    but this bit

    sleeping
    ringed with trees

    an impromptu fugue

    like a warm hand
    on the small of my back.




    Submitted on 2018-09-10 00:47:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i long for that warm hand. there and on the top of my head, to assure me that i have done my best.
    | Posted on 2018-09-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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