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Author: saartha
ASL Info:    27/F/US
Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 230 /393 /145
Words: 112
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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If I'm going to feel like this
I'll do it right,
god dammit

so I listen to sad men
singing sad songs,

and wander
out into the night

for no reason at all

the sky is low and the air
is thinking about autumn

and even above headphones
the crickets

oh, you know
the world is big and the universe

and so much of it
I don't care for at all

but this bit

ringed with trees

an impromptu fugue

like a warm hand
on the small of my back.

Submitted on 2018-09-10 00:47:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i long for that warm hand. there and on the top of my head, to assure me that i have done my best.
| Posted on 2018-09-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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