Genesis

Author: saartha ASL Info:    27/F/US Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 230 /393 /145 Words: 71

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Genesis

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The night wind picks up just a little, and the leaves like the Creation of Adam reach out their fingers the stars, too, pointing the darkened field the failing thyme pot thick scents of marigold and me, holding a cat humming on the porch all of us extending extending No Adam, no God just this moment we have created wholecloth together.

Submitted on 2018-09-10 00:48:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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The failing thyme pot and thick scents of marigold were perfectly timed here, Saartha. Just as the poem is about to float off into space, these aromatic lines carry us softly back to Earth. And then the subject changes again, and we get a brief glimpse of the observer, sitting quietly on the porch with her cat. I have the feeling of a camera zooming in on these scenes; the observed, from large to smaller, the observer, and then the bubble of thought that keeps all of these things anchored to eachother. What would you think about a full stop after 'this moment?' 'We have created wholecloth together' is powerful enough to stand alone. A lovely poem.

| Posted on 2019-02-04 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]

An appreciation of the senses is truly a blessing. This is a nice shift between that which might seem ineffable which transcends seemingly backwards through a thoughtful and finer appreciation of what we can truly feel and better appreciate, this sensory scope of creation. This kind of reminds me of something I wrote once, thanks. Lloyd

| Posted on 2018-10-04 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TbaNS3bxtUU had minute 22 playing as i read this. what a state of relaxation.

| Posted on 2018-09-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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