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    dots Submission Name: Chasing The Liedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/623/381
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsChasing The Liedots
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    Chasing the lie haphazardly

    Searching for you
    Then again searching for no one at all
    For you have moved onto a place, an atmosphere, a spiritual existence

    Chasing the lie aimlessly

    Only ever thinking of the next time I can get high
    knowing I shouldn't nevertheless knowing I just cannot not
    It'll begin with a drink
    End with a needle

    Madly chasing the lie

    Its depression
    I know this yet the darkness curls itself around me
    engulfing every part of me
    Hearing I do not deserve to be
    Wanting nothing more than what it wants
    For me to cease being

    Irrationally chasing this lie
    These lies...







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      Am I to understand from this that you have fallen off the wagon and are back on heroin? If so this makes me sad, you were clean for quite some time.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2018-09-25 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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