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    dots Submission Name: Broken Promises dots
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    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    26/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 476/419/138
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBroken Promises dots
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    I feel your fingers slipping
    Miles away and the sensation remains
    Ripping away
    I feel it everyday
    Broken promises litter the ground
    I’m the only one holding on

    Take my hand
    I’ll pull you from the sand
    I may be weak
    But my will is strong
    Take my hand
    Before you slip away

    The silence where once your voice remained
    Resounds louder than the bombs in my mind
    It would be easy to let go
    But those broken promises haunted me
    As the world moved on
    I can’t live there again

    Take my hand
    I’ll pull you from the sand
    I may be weak
    But my will is strong
    Take my hand
    Before you slip away. . .

    Again. . .




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