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    dots Submission Name: dots

    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.95 - 2136/2098/1674
    Words: 457
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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              this will find you. and you will hear.
              the bubbling of water after a ship has gone down
              the monotone of voices _ a strangled help _


              huddled over a piece of paper
              in the last light


              frankly i am sick. and there is no song ill enough
              to sate my anger.

              find me a borough. busy. with all the windows
              to smash.

              3 cops won't be enough.

              send twenty.


              and i'm angry because i feel like you are the open sky
              and i am both the plane and the guy without a parachute
              etched at the doorway

              and i'm angry because
              if you want me to


              i'll jump


              words, like this, are powerful.
              rise like the cobra's flared head
              forgo immunity. strike with impunity.
              thine self. set upon thine self.


              what i want is to sit in a stone amphitheater, amid the
              archangels, to hear a sound, so complete, so desolate
              as if God himself had had his heart broken.


              defying creation


              what i want is the epistle of meaning.


              the two of us speaking carefully.


              slurring our words. as if we were in snow.

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