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    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Words: 281
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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         1.



         i don't know what it is about a woman - she can't keep it to
         herself - but has to tell a man six different times the one
         thing that will make him feel as if he has been shot.

         

         like, it's not enough you are good - she has to test that you're
         good.















         thick and thin

         

         for better or worse. done under duress.

















         2.



         i know lost amoungst your things is a manual as yet
         unread, understanding the scorpio man.

         
















         

         to me that's what's really stupid, not engaging the person
         you expect to be your back - or being engaged enough
         yourself to know if they're even there anymore.
























         3.



         i can't say if it was you or me or both of us - that withheld
         just the little bit that was needed to keep our beautiful
         thing intact.

         
























         

         i think, maybe it was you.





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