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    dots Submission Name: dots

    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                   i will be a leaf. and you will be veins of a leaf.
         what is blank. versus, a full and able account, a braille of sorts.
         i will be a tree. and you ~ wind that grabs hold of the arm ~
         guiding its leery animations. i'll carry the
         loose unfocus of sand. and you'll be a magnus of structure.
         a magnus of wonder. the footprint.
         over which [our] love
         fills up
    &. empties.                                                                      


                                                                                         a place.                                                                                      a track.

    Submitted on 2018-11-06 02:43:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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         at the adornment               
         of your breath. your next breath.               
         i will come.               


         and carve a winter of your summer.               

    | Posted on 2018-11-06 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

         we'll have a beautiful life. you'll

         criticize it.                                                            

         and i will say ~ but wait

         here ~ we had a beautiful life                         

    | Posted on 2018-11-06 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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