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    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    i am fractured.

    like if you had a tablet. dropped the tablet. picked up
    the tablet. tried to play the tablet. but it was no longer
    working like it was supposed to be working.

    like you, if it was you, and your life, but from the aspect of
    having been jostled about in someone's carry bag.

    are you not shook up? i don't know. am i not supposed to be
    shook up?

         

    like water looking ~ for a level.






    Submitted on 2018-11-07 01:59:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    act as if there were a stenographer sent to record your every utterance. also what you had withheld. remember the good morality of your conscience. there is an unsleeping needle whose purpose is to hover over your heart. use it to check your bullshit.

    the thing is there is an audience for everything. a great ear of wilderness or nothingness listening, but withholding judgement. there is distance.





    behind this star. another star. behind that star. an
    eye _____________ and in this way ~ i like to think of the motor vehicles zipping nicely along the I-4 ~ how
    mine is very obviously



    an engine with smoke pouring out of it.


    | Posted on 2018-11-12 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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