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    dots Submission Name: I am a sorry son. Part twodots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 303/232/297
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
    Total Views: 104
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    Bytes: 995



    Description:
       I wanted to experiment with my gender and sexuality and it got me somewhere I didn't know existed. I just wanted to know where I could go when without a place to recall. It was then that all the places became the same.
    I don't know what I can do but hope for the wisdom I acquired in this past life to have gone somewhere much needed. I can only pray that God took my poetry and with it painted a mural somewhere. Do you think thoughts can travel?


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    dotsI am a sorry son. Part twodots
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    Look at your reflection
    It's always a good distraction

    I took my own rights
    And my own preferences and destroyed them.

    Like a curious child as to what would be left over
    All the privilege I exploited my whole world it has hindered

    It isn't that anybody's taken
    Or done any of all the branding
    Rather than keep what I made
    Preserve what I created
    I downsized every ounce of me and became sedated

    I don't remember my last embrace
    Or all the kind words I erased
    I can't recall all my melodies like I used to
    I don't have it in me to see the skies a pure blue

    I can't look people in the eye with interest
    Their eyes tell me that I'm something to detest

    I've entered this realm
    Of a witches cackling
    And the laughter is just my own
    Laughing something right back at me




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      Hmm, I suggest to myself that I should read part one before commenting.
    | Posted on 2018-12-07 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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