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    dots Submission Name: Human Progressiondots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.49 - 5/120/135
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHuman Progressiondots
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    Open up the heart to find me
    Sew close my mouth so I see

    All my broken parts are shaking
    Make them all free for the taking

    Just don't show them to my mom please
    I don't want her hands on those keys

    Turn me into something better
    Maybe then I'll finally send this letter

    Then they'd see what I have become
    Although it won't really change the outcome

    Should I really change me
    Or what I let you see





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