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    dots Submission Name: Labor Painsdots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 311/245/330
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsLabor Painsdots
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    I have become smoke
    And the air it leaves me
    In a needle point pain
    Like an addict I keep keening

    What is pure has in itself static
    Of what it does not complete
    These bodies that surround me
    Bring light to a new unknowing

    Seething will it stay

    Their compost it breathes me
    For I am their waste
    When it does not reach me
    I will make for chaste

    The area that keeps me
    Crowded in this place
    Changes in the reaping
    Of a hard earned pase.




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